when I try
to
taste you
as if
you
were mine
the pith
peels
from my mouth
and dances
back
into yours
"the pith peels" Wonderful turn of phrase; well followed by the image of dancing. Excellent sense of movement to minimalist lines.
Delivered like a zen circle. As Adam said there is a "notion of motion" in here , greatly placed.
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"the pith
peels"
Wonderful turn of phrase; well followed by the image of dancing. Excellent sense of movement to minimalist lines.
Delivered like a zen circle. As Adam said there is a "notion of motion" in here , greatly placed.
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