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16 February 2011

when
I am
ripped
from the
seams
of myself
I am spilt
into the cool
coo
of
sky
spiralling
in
parallel
to my
conscious
self
seeing the
joy
I am
wrapped
in
the
coldness
and
the
wonder


part of  http://onestoppoetry.com/ one shot wednesday

9 comments:

Kat said...

I really like it! It reminds me of flying in my dreams :)

Brian Miller said...

nice...i like the diametric images...and the word play of cool coo...

Fireblossom said...

Coo coo coolness!

dustus said...

"spiralling
in
parallel"

Use of "coo"is also inventive; short lines with impact.

Anonymous said...

Call it liberation from the bondage of self or spiritual growth or simply a moment's serenity, acceptance of the moment as it is the purest breath of free, clean air. Nicely done

Costis Demos {Ghostdog} said...

Wonderful flow, dreamy verse. A column of inspiration, just as it is posted as such.
Nice resounding words, patient imagery.

Kisses to cat!

cat cray said...

I am touched that you all found something in it to like and connect with, thank you for reading

Anonymous said...

Moved me,really nice stuff!

Shashidhar Sharma said...

Good one... Cool coo of the sky.. very wonderful words.. and I enjoyed it immensely...

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