'..canals like slitveins bleed...' ~ 21 lines cut and pared to perfection.
Strong piece, really hits home, nicely done!
dang...sharp imagery and def carries its weight in the punch card...smiles. excellent verse
Love the imagery in this poem.Particulary the lines "and illuminates the half cut city skyline", "blooming buds the shape ofsatellite dishes" and "how it sitson a dead poets hill".Great poem.
Love the urban impressions -- "half cut city skyline" and "blooming buds the shape of satellite dishes". Enjoyed this. Ravenblackhttp://theotherdayplace.blogspot.com
Some of the wonderful imagery here. Terrific it is!
a key bob from a punch card what an excellent ending so well donehttp://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/18/farewell-my-three-legged-friend/
some awesome images here... "how it hangs/ between clavicles and vowels...", plus I love the abrupt line lengths. great piece. :)
Were you to gain entry, you may hear his voice still resonates. Or does the angel say his words now?I think there is a spiritual tone to your poem, soft yet moving. Nice.It is not often an oyster yields a pearl. Here is an exception.Cheers!
Another really good poem, Cat. Referencing Neruda's tomatoes and beautiful nudes and commitment to social justice ('Just Is')in the urban pathos of London. And all held together with the hiphop-esque wordplay and internal rhyme of the title. Think it might just have turned the corners of the laureate's lips ever so slightly upwards.
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